Wednesday, May 23, 2007

Computers-Draft 1 *1~2*
Computers are playing an important role in our daily life. With the help of it, we can get the latest fashion, news and weather reports no matter when and where we need them. Also, many artists and writers will do the data collections in order that they can find the brainstorms from it. Besides used in works, it’s also used in entertainment. For example, we use it to do shopping not only because the price is cheaper but the speed is faster. We use it to play games, watch films, and chat with others as well. As a result, I can say there’s no doubt that we can not live without computers.

Personally, I have a liking for computers. Although it probably hurt our eyes, the computer benefits me a lot. For one thing is it can help me make more friends through the Internet. In addition, I can relax myself by listening to music, shopping or everything I like to do in my leisure time. Also, it can save much time to achieve my goals easily. But the most important factor for me is it can increase my knowledge. In such a hurried society, you’d better increase and absorb as much knowledge as you can.

4 comments:

Penny said...

For example, we use it to do shopping not only the price is cheaper but the speed is faster.
(我把because給刪了!有跟沒有好像都可以!再問一下老師吧!)

下面提到的goal跟knowledge可以再說清楚是關於什麼的!
大致沒什麼問題了!

Sally Sun said...

With the help of it,"it"複數喔

Also, many artists and writers will do the data
我建議will 可以用can

Beside used in works

文章當中電腦的單複數小心

林小雞 said...

no matter when and where we need them.
*no matter anytime and anywhere we need them.

Anonymous said...

我覺得都沒什麼問題了